COMMISSIONS UNIT: Feedback from Zoe on our Fine Cut

Today we received some feedback from Zoe on our fine cut.

- She recommended that we speed up the introduction. It takes too long to get into the documentary and therefore may lose the audience's attention at this early point in the documentary. Alex's delivery is quite slow (which is intended) so we just need to add some fast paced music in order to lift the mood. We have already begun searching for music, we just need to add it into the edit.

- She also recommended that we cut down the interview of Alex's grandparents. We just need to keep the important facts and cut out the parts where there is no new information being revealed. We also need to cover the jump cuts with GVs and other cutaway shots. Zoe also suggested that we could paint Alex's grandparents as 'the enemy' as they may be more dangerous than young people on the road and therefore be unfairly pushing up the price for young people.

- We also need to add in establishing shots in order to introduce the locations and subjects. We have filmed these shots, we just need to add them into the edit.

- We still need to merge the interviews more. We need cut up the insurance broker's interview and use clips of it throughout the documentary rather than leaving the interview as a big chunk at the end of the documentary.