Following the rehearsal with the presenters and the feedback session with Helen, we have developed the 4th version of the script which will hopefully be the final version.
- I have changed the introduction to the show to clarify to the audience what the purpose of the show is. Myself and Melissa thought our mission statement was clear as we know ourselves what the show is about but Helen pointed out that "the show that helps you take current fashion trends and style them in different and original ways" can be interpreted very ambiguously. Therefore, the script has now been changed to say "the show that helps you take current fashion trends and style them in ways to help you stand out from the crowd" before adding the example of the typical social media and reality star trends. This helps to clarify to the audience that were hoping to show them ways of styling trends that are different to the mainstream.
- I have added more to the presenters' introductions to themselves. Helen fed back that the audience doesn't know anything about who Alfie and Adeline are - there needed to be more information for the audience to clarify who they are and what they're doing in relation to the show. As we wanted one presenter to be our fashion expert and one to be our bubbly presenter, we needed to make this clear through their dialogue so that the audience can understand this.
- Helen suggested that the teaser trailer needs to be more specific and only tease half the sections of the show. The audience doesn't need to know absolutely everything that's coming up in the show. I changed the script to tease the first two sections and made these more specific so the audience know exactly what's coming.
- Steals of the Season also got changed to Styles of the Season as 'Steals' suggests that the item is a bargain when this isn't necessarily the case with our trends - they're affordable but not an absolute bargain.
- The intro to this section was also changed to make it clearer to the audience what the purpose of this section is. We also wanted to clarify that the models used are everyday people (not catwalk models) to help the audience visualise how these trends may work on them.
- I had written that the plaid trend could be styled with pastel colours, however, pastel colours is our trend for the catwalk and therefore is mentioned later in the script. As this makes the section a little repetitive, I removed it from this section of the script so it is only mentioned on the catwalk.
- Helen suggested we add reasons for why to watch these trends. Therefore, for trench coats we added in that these coats are ideal for coping with the changing seasons (which is when our show is broadcast - the transition between Spring / Summer).
- When introducing the catwalk trend the transition we used previously was a bit weak - "So apart from these, there's one fashion trend which we've been particularly loving". This has now been changed to "But, if I were to pick just one trend to watch this Spring".
- The link between the women's and men's trends was quite weak so this was changed from "Well now we've seen the women's steals of the season, let's go onto the mens!" to "Now, guys we haven’t forgotten about you! There’s no mesh involved with the mens trends, don’t worry!". This adds to the light hearted tone of the programme and is a much better link between the sections.
- Helen suggested that the Steals of the Season (now Styles of the Season) section was too list like and needed to be more conversational. I have updated the script to include more ad libbed sections and more conversational bits rather than merely listing the items for each trend.
- The fashion fails segment previously only included a small introduction from the presenters before moving into the audience. This needed to be changed as it felt very scripted and staged. We have added in a section for Alfie to ad lib a story about a fashion fail. This will help the audience relate to the presenters and help the section flow better as this allows a good link to move into the audience and hear about their fashion fails.
- Now that we have confirmed both our fashion fails contributors and received their pictures, I was able to add this into the script. This section does involve a lot of ad libbing as Alfie's response relies on what the audience members say.
- The rest of the script was written by Melissa but I still looked over it to ensure the tone matched my half.
- The Old To New section has remained the same as we felt this was a strong point of the script - the dialogue is very conversational and natural which is exactly the tone we want to achieve with this show.
- The introduction to the DIY section has remained very similar except Adeline's scarf story has been amended to be ad libbed rather than scripted - this was changed to clarify to Adeline that she does not have to stick to the script and can talk about the scarf story in a way that feels natural to her.
- The interview questions for Bonnie have been changed to focus on online shopping and buying from independent sellers vs. shopping in the high street and buying from big high street chains. This section before felt like it didn't have a lot of purpose and didn't add any more information that wasn't already covered in the accompanying VT. It has now been changed to focus more of the business side of the subject which isn't mentioned at all in the VT. We have then included some questions about Bonnie's specific designs to make the interview more personal to her.
- We have also had to change the Drag Act interview section as unfortunately our previous drag act was no longer available for the show. The questions have now been updated to focus more specifically on our new drag queen and where they find their style inspirations. This interview really adds to our brand as a chat show focusing on anti-mainstream trends as the drag queen's fashion is unlike anything seen on the high street.
- The round up has remained the same as this has worked really well in rehearsals.
We will use this script in rehearsals to see how this updated version works. Hopefully this version won't need altering and will be our final version for the show. However, we will ask the presenters how they feel about the script once we have rehearsed with it and see if they recommend any changes that would suit them better.
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