Feedback:
- maybe don't show diagnosis of schizophrenia, let audience see it / work it out for themselves.
- either start from John leaving the doctor's office or start in doctor's office but don't hear diagnosis
- maybe use different mental disorder (such as bipolar disorder - have Kyle switching from nice to destructive).
- think of concise way to show Kyle becoming more destructive
- ditch coffee shop part of story - adds nothing to story
- don't go too elaborate with the hallucination idea, keep it relatively normal but with subtle hints at Kyle just being a hallucination.
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